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She awoke in a daze.



Groggy, and confused, she clenched her eyes shut, pressing against her forehead to relieve the pain of the unrelenting, blinding light. "Ugh… what time is it?"



Her back hurt. She opened her eyes, still fighting against the sight-hindering sun in order to study her surroundings.



She was laying on the ground, her wings trapped underneath her torso. She rolled over, and stood up, all the while cynically laughing at her own stupidity.



"Haha, must've fallen off," she said to herself.



Rainbow Dash haphazardly dusted herself off, and began making her way to Rarity's Boutique.



"…Here goes."



---



It's was morning. Well, a few hours past morning. Rarity had stayed up all night, scrambling to finish Rainbow Dash's dress. She couldn't help but wonder what Rainbow would use such a frilly, pink dress for, or why she needed it so soon. It wasn't often she'd receive rush orders, but then again it wasn't often Rainbow Dash of all ponies ordered anything from her shop.



It needed to be finished, and it needed to be perfect. Rainbow Dash had spared no expense in employing Rarity to tailor her dress. Express orders from such a talented pony didn't come cheap, and for good reason.



"It's a good thing she's late," Rarity sighed as she wiped a bit of sweat from her brow. "I do hope she is satisfied with my work."



Rarity took one last once-over of the dress, making sure every stitch and hem was in proper placement.



She smiled. "Exactly what she asked for."



But, her smile quickly faded as she thought more and more about why Rainbow would have her go through so much trouble to make a dress. However, she didn't have much time to dwell on the thought.



The sound of a light knock at her door signaled her to put on her best face, and prepare for the presentation.



The bell attached to the door's frame chimed as she welcomed her customer into her place of work.



"Rainbow! It's so lovely to see you! You'll be happy to know I've been hard at work putting on the final touches of your dress. It was a lot of work, but for a friend, especially a friend willing to place an express order, which as you know, doesn't come cheap, I'm happy to oblige."



Rainbow registered very little of what Rarity had been gleaming at her. She didn't bother to reply, or smile in return, or anything. A simple nod was enough for Rarity to acknowledge Dash at least halfway knew what was going on.



Rarity took the moment of awkward silence to once again suppress her doubts. "Now, right this way please."



Rainbow Dash really wasn't in the mood for Rarity's boisterous way of saying things. It was going to be hard enough wearing it in public, let alone acting as if she enjoyed doing so. She just wanted to get the dress and go.



---



"Excuse me, Sir, but have you seen Rainbow Dash?"



"Hello. Good morning. Have you seen Rainbow Dash by any chance?



"I'm sorry to bother you, but I'm looking for Rainbow Dash. Have you seen her?



Twilight Sparkle stopped everypony she crossed in attempt to find her friend. Her reply from The Princess did not carry a sense of urgency, but as a pony in desperate need to help a friend, it did for Twilight. She was finally able to do something. She could finally make up for not being of any help before. If only she could actually find Rainbow anywhere.



She stopped in her tracks, looking in the direction of Rarity's Boutique.



"I wonder if Rarity knows where she could be." She thought to herself as she continued on her new path.



---



Rainbow Dash winced and grunted as Rarity did her best to fit her into the dress.



"Ugh! It's… really tight." Rainbow found it difficult to speak properly with the layers of fabric pressing against her chest.



Rarity did nothing but laugh away Rainbow's concerns. "Oh, Darling, it's supposed to be that way! It will do more to show off your girlish figure if it's a little too tight, you know." She gripped another strand of lace with her teeth, pulling against the force of Rainbow's cemented hooves.



She let out a sigh of relief and exhaustion. "There! That ought to do it!"



Rarity quickly left the room, leaving Rainbow alone, wondering what in Equestria she looked like.



The question did not linger in Rainbow's thoughts for long. Rarity returned as hastily as she had left; only now she was guiding a large mirror on wheels in place in front of Rainbow Dash with a magic aura.



Rarity took a moment to study Rainbow Dash, who was busy inspecting herself in the mirror. "So, what do you think?"



Rainbow found herself unable to say anything. She continued to gaze through the reflection in the mirror. It couldn't be her. She would never dress that way. As thoughts of her being seen in public looking like the reflection raced past her, tears began to trickle down the sides of her face.



Rarity immediately noticed the unspoken criticism, and took action. "What's wrong, Deary? Do you not like the color? The shape? Is it too frilly? Is it too… girly?"



Rainbow Dash closed her eyes, letting her head hang down. "It's… perfect."



She turned around, looking down to Rarity from her pedestal, and repeated the lie.



"It's perfect."



The farce rattled through Rainbow Dash, who was now feeling the gravity of what she had gotten herself into. This pony in the mirror was her. There was no doubt anymore; she was a mare, and she always would be.



---



Twilight quietly stepped into the shop. The door was already open, so she assumed it would be okay to go ahead in. She looked about, hoping to find Rarity.



She entered one of the many of the back rooms, the door of which had also been left open, to find Rarity busy with a customer.



"Oh, hello Rarity," she stammered. "I didn't realize you were with someone. I can come back a little later if you need me to. It's just I've been looking for---"



Her jaw physically dropped when she realized exactly who Rarity's customer was, leaving her unable to finish her thought.



"… R-Rainbow Dash?"



A pony with rainbow hair, and a blue coat clad in a beautifully designed dress, emblazoned with perfectly and eloquently placed frills, bows, and gemstones turned to greet her with a glare.



"Yes?"

So, I'm trying hard to get these out faster than I have in the past. Work has been insane all week, so this one is a little past due. But, luckily, I had the day off today, so I was able to write the next chapter for everypony to read.

As always, comments and criticism are greatly appreciated.

On a side note, I never realized how much alliteration I use when I write. I'm not sure if that's good or bad, but I can't really help it.

Also, please take some time to consider donating to my own, actual transition. Even if it's just $1, every little bit helps me out immensely: www.gofundme.com/dnzh00

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:iconkadin8:
kadin8 Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
best story ever Clapping Pony Icon - Rainbow Dash Clapping Pony Icon - Rainbow Dash 
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olihmajor Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012
I like your writing so far ^_^
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EpicRoflcop Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
how can it show her girlish figure when shes a pony.
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vane998 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Student Artist
Girlish pony figure I gess
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penguinprotecter Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't use your fancy mathematics to muddle the issue. :)
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EpicRoflcop Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
lol
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Cuauhtemotzin Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
Fantastic job!
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SmudoVier Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
A wise deviant artist once told me that Immersion is what happens when your reader is able to feel the emotions as though they were their own. From what i've seen in comments there are people who can relate to what Rainbow Dash is going through, people who have gone through the exact same process. I have a bit of a harder time because i'm not transgendered and cannot relate as well as others would be able to. I don't think i can ever relate to the characters as well as you or other readers might be able to, because i don't and probably never will understand the confusion that Rainbow Dash is under, and what it is like to be TG.


BUT WITH THAT SAID


You do a wonderful job of conveying how RD feels, the dress is resignation to his/her fate (the reason for the slash and both pronouns is because i am unfortunetly very uneducated with people who are transgendered, sorry for my unintellegence), Twilight's own confusion, even Fluttershy a few chapters back (who you wrote perfectly as by the way, not an out of character moment in sight) and her own helplessness. It's easy to get loss and see the characters themselves because you do a wonderful job at writing and conveying the story.

The idea of TG itself in FiM is something i have only seen once, in a fanfiction that i only read recently and both times i have seen it (yours and theirs) the entire story is written wonderful and i am able to immerse myself in the story. You are able to display a lot of powerful emotions in few words. While i can't relate to some aspects of the story, i am able to enjoy myself and see how RD feels, even though it's difficult and possible impossible for me to understand it.


In short, it's a wonderful story and i cannot wait for more. C=
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Cuauhtemotzin Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
Out of interest, what was the name of the other FiM TG story you've read?
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SmudoVier Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
It was the first chapter of a story called "The Clinic" i read on EqDaily.
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